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Parents should spend more time with their children helping them with their homework. Do you agree or disagree?

#parents #time #children #homework
Sometime people behave in different manner deliberated,
that is
 the personalities of the people, which encoded in their genes since their birth. I agree that, but
this
 can be changed, not all habit's but most of them.
This
 essay considers human behaviours are linked with their genetically elements And some of them can be altered with practices.
Firstly
,
to begin
 with Humans has been created on
this
 earth with certain natural qualities,
however
 the nature of human's genetically imprinted in their genes. It's difficult to alter.We have witnessed from our childhood to an adult soon.
For instance
, the children are intimate their mother, father or grandfather.It seems that Their habits
also
 can be transmitted to their offsprings.
Nevertheless
, Behaviour is a different things, learning centres are playing rolls and shaping you,
hence
 human act from on their surrounding and needs. If a person anxiety by birth, he can be treated with extra care so he can transform into new personalities, with the perfect practices we can alter their habits but Not everything.Because some of their habits are deeply from their genes that can never be altered in single life cycles. To conclude, some personal traits are subject to change
accordingly
 their situation and needs, even though it's true that some natural behaviours are remain same.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • parental involvement
  • academic development
  • parent-child relationship
  • supported and encouraged
  • confidence and independence
  • educational strategies
  • autonomous learning
  • foster a love for learning
  • tailored interventions
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