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An Increasing Number Of Children Are Overweight These Days

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Many and more children becoming more obese and suffering from various health issues.
the
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The
 main cause of
health obesity
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health, obesity
 is eating
alot
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a lot
 of junk
food
 and fast
food
 rather than traditional foods.
encouraging
Suggestion
Encouraging
 physical activity and promoting healthy habits can tackle
this
 menace. Fast
food
 is mushrooming all over the world. Now-a-days every child prefers to eat outside because it is addictive.Unfortunately
,
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,
junk
food
 containing high amount of carbohydrates and calories.
it
Suggestion
It
 creates a lot of negative impact on
childern's
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children's
children
child
child's
 health. These days
childern
a young person of either sex
children
 are motivated to a sedentary and luxurious lifestyle. They hardly flex a muscle. They sit computers
,
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,
televisions and mainly on smartphones spending their time.
This
 creates a lot of physical imbalance which leads to obesity. Encouraging children to get physically active by doing always physical work.
rather
Suggestion
Rather
 than sitting
in
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at
 home in front smart phones they should go to play out
.
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.
Gradually they should prefer playing out
instead
 sitting alone
in
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at
 home.
parents
Suggestion
Parents
 must assure that their children are eating healthy meal daily. Occasionally having a pizza or burger is fine, no harm done.But having it regularly causes
damageparents
Suggestion
damage parents
 must monitor and intend their kids to opt any active outdoor sport. Playing or doing any kind of physical work
help
Suggestion
helps
 them gradually to lose its weight.
Thus obesity
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Thus, obesity
 can be controlled or demolished. In conclusion, children are becoming obese due to the consumption of fatty foods.
This
 can be controlled by a regular exercise or any type of physical work.
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