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Health experts believe that walking is a good exercise for health. However, people are walking less nowadays. Why is this happening how can people be encourage to walk more?

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In the pace of life people have become
concentrate
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concentrated
 towards their
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health forgetting
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health, forgetting
 that, "
Health
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 is wealth", where walking is a good exercise for
health
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 but some people could not understand
this
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.Here, I am going to write reasons and how to encourage people for walking in trail paragraphs. To start with, as lives are getting stressed
firstly
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, because of the hectic work schedule people usually not prefer walking.
Secondly
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, at every small work they reach that place situated near their home by vehicles rather than walk.
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,
public
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the public
 wants to stay in their comfort zone they want to entertain their self in
house
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the house
a house
 they don't want to come in natural air because of there is
lack
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a lack
 of public walking space like
garden
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a garden
.
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,
government
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the government
should saw
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should see
 the advantages of walking in the advertisements and make people aware about their
health
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.
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 the administration should make more gardens
,
Accept space
,
parks and walking path so people can be
encourage
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encouraged
 to walk
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, some
health
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 organisations should campaign in
different society
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a different society
 and tell people about advantages of walking and aware them about disadvantages if they not start walking as soon as possible. Considering all the points, government have to make park, gardens and people
also
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 have to encourage their self for walking.
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