Health experts believe that walking is a good exercise for health. However, people are walking less nowadays. Why is this happening how can people be encourage to walk more?

In the pace of life people have become
concentrate
Suggestion
concentrated
towards their
health forgetting
Accept comma addition
health, forgetting
that, "
Health
is wealth", where walking is a good exercise for
health
but some people could not understand
this
.Here, I am going to write reasons and how to encourage people for walking in trail paragraphs. To start with, as lives are getting stressed
firstly
, because of the hectic work schedule people usually not prefer walking.
Secondly
, at every small work they reach that place situated near their home by vehicles rather than walk.
Lastly
,
public
Suggestion
the public
wants to stay in their comfort zone they want to entertain their self in
house
Suggestion
the house
a house
they don't want to come in natural air because of there is
lack
Suggestion
a lack
of public walking space like
garden
Suggestion
a garden
.
Moreover
,
government
Suggestion
the government
should saw
Suggestion
should see
the advantages of walking in the advertisements and make people aware about their
health
.
In addition
the administration should make more gardens
,
Accept space
,
parks and walking path so people can be
encourage
Suggestion
encouraged
to walk
likewise
, some
health
organisations should campaign in
different society
Suggestion
a different society
and tell people about advantages of walking and aware them about disadvantages if they not start walking as soon as possible. Considering all the points, government have to make park, gardens and people
also
have to encourage their self for walking.

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