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An increasing number of people are preferring to eat fast food regularly, it causes a lot of heath issues. Some people think the only solution is to ban it completely. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #food #heath #ban
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In the modern era with a fast paced lifestyle, people nowadays did not get enough
time
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 to cook their meals from scratch. At that
time
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, they opted methods which give
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 in a speedy manner like processed foods or easy-to-make foods.
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 options are easier to look, but they are creating issues related to
health
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, opined by some people to completely ban these kind of meals. I totally disagree with the idea, buttressing it in the upcoming paragraphs.
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 with, fast
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 is the best alternative than that of its counterpart, traditional cooked
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 in terms of the easiest to make.
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, when it comes to the nutritional values, the former come into the least preferred option. The reason behind
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 can be the un-assurance of the manufacturing process as of which materials are used, cooking procedures etc.,. But again, they provide the nutritional values either on their labels or on their menus. On the flip side, if the authorities impose a permanent ban on
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 items,
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 can create a hurdle in people’s lives. There is no denying the fact that processed and ready cooked foods have become a habit of their lives and by doing so, they have to manage more
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 in the already busy timeline.
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 that, having fast
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 in the
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 of need or on occasions can not create a bad impact on people’s
health
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. In order to tackle
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 issues, they should be made aware about
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 items and their consequences on regular usage.
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, proper
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 management should be encouraged to ensure proper meals and adequate workout, as only changing eating habits will not help the overall
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. To conclude, banning fast
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 is totally unjustifiable as it is not the only remedy to improve people’s
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.
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 of
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, collection of different actions should be done.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • obesity
  • diabetes
  • heart disease
  • nutritional value
  • affordability
  • convenience
  • appealing choice
  • unemployment
  • industry revenues
  • consumer choices
  • regulating
  • nutritional content
  • balanced approach
  • healthy food options
  • incentivize
  • dependency
  • community initiatives
  • urban farming
  • cooking classes
  • outright ban
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