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An increasing number of people are preferring to eat fast food regularly, it causes a lot of heath issues. Some people think the only solution is to ban it completely. Do you agree or disagree?

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In the modern era fast paced lifestyle, people not getting enough time to cook meals in their home from scratch.In that hurry, they opt speedy manners to overcome the delay.
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Such
 options are easier to look, but they are creating issues related to health, opined by some people to completely ban these type of
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 items. I totally disagree with
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 idea, buttressing it in the upcoming paragraphs.
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To
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,
 fast
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 is the better alternative compared to the traditional ones in the aspect of preparation time.But fast
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 contains less nutritional values and high calories. Fast
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 is a least preferred option for people todays because manufacturers cannot give assurance over their products that which materials used, cooking process etc.Though they have nutritional values over their packing or on their menus. On the other flip, if the government imposes ban on these
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 items, it will be
hurdle
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hurdles
 to people.There is
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 a denying fact that
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 type of
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 is not a habit for the people.
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Besides
 that, having fast
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 occasionally doesn't create any harm
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 In order to tackle health issues government should bring awareness regarding the regular usage.
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, proper time management should be encouraged to ensure proper meals and adequate workout. Restricting
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 habits may not help overall health In conclusion
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it is totally
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 to ban fast
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 as it is not the one and only remedy.
instead
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 of
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