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The news is an important source of knowledge for all of us about the world, especially in this era of technology. Journalists are mainly responsible to bring this news to us but not all of them are true to their responsibilities and ethics. How much can we trust the journalists? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

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Television and newspapers play very crucial role in our daily lives. They are the primary source of the news and they became a part of our
lives
Suggestion
life
. They can give a lot of information about the world and
also
 creates a strong influence on us. Some people suggest that there should be restrictions on a detailed description of
crime
 in the newspapers and television and I strongly agree with them. There are a lot of reasons to support that statement. If a
crime
 happens, it is good if
public
Suggestion
the public
 knows about that incident. It makes people aware of the situation and look after their security, but sometimes
giving information more
Suggestion
giving more information
 than required is not good for society. It will affect in several ways, but importantly it will give a clear view to the intruders and offenders how
to do
Suggestion
doing
 a
crime
.
For example
, if television is explaining how the bank robbery happen in
clear way
Suggestion
a clear way
the clear way
clear ways
, it will be useful to the other criminal who has the intentions to similar
crime
. It makes him to do
crime
 easily and more accurately. Another reason to support the statement is the continuous broadcast or publication of the
crime
 in detail will influence the thoughts of the teenagers and people in weak mental state. It will be a severe effect on the society. Looking
crime
 repeatedly in a detailed manner influence some people to do similar things and
also
 makes look into it as a very normal condition. To conclude, a detailed description of
crime
 in the newspapers and television is not healthy to the society in different ways. Always there should be a
restrictions
Suggestion
restriction
 on the broadcasting and description of the crimes.

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