Children nowadays spend a great deal of time watching television. However, television cannot replace the book as a learning tool. Which is why children are less well educated today. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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Recent years, children spend their most of time watching television. Whereas it doesn't supersede books as an education enhancement tool. In my opinion,

shows hardly make the offsprings intelligent. On the one hand, the books are more included with a plethora of information.

Hence

although

act as an entertainment for teenagers, it doesn't facilitate the theoretical ability in-depth.

For example

, a child whose wish to become a nurse, can never qualify the entrance exam by watching the

series and shows. It should need technical intelligence which solely get by reading books.

Moreover

, a book is a silent tool, that help to improve reading skills.

On the other hand

, even though, the

has bad impacts on the student's life, by seeing some useful videos

such

as related to the study topic, relevant topic will improve memory power. Masses remember majority of ideas or content when they are visually exposed to it.

Instead

of trivial shows, significant shows wouldn't divert the mind from academic. In conclusion,

although

has a vital role in daily life, books are the most decisive tool in order to gain theoretical proficiency.

Sat Mar 07 2020

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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7Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

189 words

5.00

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Children nowadays spend a great deal of time watching television. However, television cannot replace the book as a learning tool. Which is why children are less well educated today. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Some people say that students who achieve the highest scorer in their exams should be rewarded. Others say that those who show progress should be rewarded instead. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In some cultures, children are often told that they can achive anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this messages?

In the past, many male leaders had led our society to conflicts and violence. The world would be better governed and more peaceful if it were ruled by women.

Some people think that the government should make university education free for all students, regardless of their financial situation. To what extent do you agree or disagree?