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Some people don't like leave in the small city because they can't develop there a skill in there. How far do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Nowadays immigration to the big
cities in
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cities, in
 order to live and developing skills is one of the hot topics in society. A number of people believe that living in a small
city
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lead
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leads
 to dreams destruction.
if
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If
 people think properly, they will see living in
the small
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smaller
 cities to some extent can be helpful to develop their skills.
in
Suggestion
In
 order to
approvel
give sanction to
approve
this
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 statement, we can say in most of the cases, the big cities are far more advanced than
the small
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smaller
 cities and have more facilities compared with the small cities.
This
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 is obvious that more facilities
such
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 as better schools and college and more job opportunities can be led to skills development.
In addition
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, there is a contest between members of society for reaching to better positions in the big cities, and everyone
know
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knows
 that the sense of competition in the right way is an important factor
to
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in
 developing skills.
On the contrary
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, living in a small
city
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 has
it's
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 benefits.
For
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example people
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example, people
 spend far less time in the way
for
Suggestion
of
 reaching to their destination and they have a lot of time for developing their skills. A
further
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 point is that in a small
city
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 people face far less problems
such
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 as higher Life expenses and they can focus on their dreams to become reality.
Although
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the small
Suggestion
smaller
the smaller
the smallest
 cities have not the same facilities that exist in the big cities, it is enough that people can be satisfied with their lives. To
sumup
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sum up
, in my
opinion if
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opinion, if
 people really tend to develop their skills, they should
endur
put up with something or somebody unpleasant
endure
endured
endures
 hardships and be patient and
then
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 they can reach
to
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for
 their goals and no matter where they are. But living in a small
city
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, because of
it's
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 calmness, can help people to upgrade their skills.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • develop a skill
  • access to resources
  • specialized learning
  • mentorship
  • online courses
  • diversity of job opportunities
  • expertise
  • close-knit community
  • personalized support
  • networking opportunities
  • remote work
  • physical location
  • nature-based skills
  • niche industries
  • government programs
  • community programs
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