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Some people think that children benefit from the TV and they should spend much time on it, but others support that children should not watch TV. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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It is considered that children have many advantages watching
TV
 where as some think that's is not a good practise.I believe that watching
TV
 is really important for children Television is a mode of entertainment which can be very useful in children's early stages of education.
TV
 communicates the information through cartoons,
TV
 programmes etc. A lot of skills can be developed with the help of television. A child in my street watches cartoon series on
TV
 a lot. He learned different languages through the series.Kids can learn a wide variety of knowledge about different cultures While others argue that, getting stuck to
TV
 for more hours can be harmful too. Children get addicted to
TV
 rather than going out and play. They hardly stretch a muscle. There is a c
,
Accept space
,
ance of getting eye related problems to kids
Accept space
,
In conclusion,spending more time on television is not harmful,but it should be limited

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