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Nowadays online shopping is extremely popular. Discuss the impact of it on the environment

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Shopping on the Internet has become one of our ways in our daily life.
However
,
this
 prevalent but excessive behaviour has induced a series of environmental problems. In the following, I am going to elaborate the effect of online shopping of the problem mentioned above.
First
 of all, one of the negative environmental effects of e-shopping is deforestation. In order to deliver the products safely to the customers' hands, layers of layers of wrappings and boxes of boxes as if Russian dolls, hide the purchases inside a small box. Buyers may probably take five minutes to unwrap it.
This
 is a living example to show us the reason why the deforestation rate in
Amazon
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the Amazon
 has been increasing over these years. Escalating the popularity of
onlie
on a regular route of a railroad or bus or airline system
online
 shopping raises the demand of paper for wrapping. Paper comes from the trees which
are born
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bear
 in the forest. Aggravating the size of deforestation, the greenhouse gases, which are supposed to be locked up
inside
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in
 the trees, are unleashed to the Earth.
Consequently
, the extreme weather would become dominant, the greenhouse effect would be more obvious and eventually exacerbating the global warming.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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