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Many people decide on a career path early in their lives and keep to it. This, they argue, leads to a more satisfying working life. To what extent do you agree with this view? What other things can people do in order to have a satisfying working life?

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A large group of people
believe
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believes
 that deciding on their future
endevours
a purposeful or industrious undertaking (especially one that requires effort or boldness)
endeavours
 in
a
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an
 early stage of their
life
 is more
benificial
promoting or enhancing well-being
beneficial
 as it would lead to a
fullfilling
put in effect
fulfilling
 work
life
. In my opinion, I agree that choosing a
feild
record in a public office or in a court of law
filed
filled
field
 as soon as possible will give
one
 head start which provides
one
 a good settlement in
life
 is
definetly
without question and beyond doubt
definitely
 a worth while. In order
to to
in the direction of
to
 do so,
one
 has to make up their own mind on many factors before they set their foot into a particular profession
.
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.
firstly
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Firstly
,
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,
 having an idea of what to do in
life
 is a big question
,
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,
 getting a grip
of
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on
 what
one
 wants to do in
life
 will give a major boost to a person. It will not only keep
one
motivated but
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motivated, but
also
 give
satisfation
the contentment one feels when one has fulfilled a desire, need, or expectation
satisfaction
 about the clear idea in
one
's mind.
secondly
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Secondly
,

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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