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pollution and other environmental damage is caused mainly by developing countries which helps them become richer. To what extent do you agree with this opinion?

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In the modern world
pollution
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 is a relevant issue that af
fect b
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affects
oth environment and our health. The issue has been largely debated among civilized countries since it is
always h
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is, always
as been linked to the industrial development. Indeed, some people believe that
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 is an unavoidable consequence of progress. On the one hand, it is certainly true that
pollution
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 historically increased in countries that have experienced a growth.
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, the 18th century Industrial Revolution in Europe was remembered not only for the increase of average po
pulation income b
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population, income
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also
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 for the increase of breathing de
seas d
an impairment of health or a condition of abnormal functioning
disease
ue to air
pollution
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. Looking at mo
re recent example,
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a more recent example
China has experienced a double-digit growth in
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st years but i
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the last years, but
the last years but
n parallel it has been considered the pr
imary r
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primarily
esponsible for the oz
on h
a colorless gas (O3) soluble in alkalis and cold water; a strong oxidizing agent; can be produced by electric discharge in oxygen or by the action of ultraviolet radiation on oxygen in the stratosphere (where it acts as a screen for ultraviolet radiation)
ozone
ole in the
second
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 mi
llenium.
a span of 1000 years
millennium
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, it is important to not forget what innovation has done for improving the condition of polluted air, water and soil. Indeed, if it is possible now to drive an electric car, to have biodegradable materials or to produce energy with wi
nd i
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the wind
t is only thanks to the development in richer countries.
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, there are now some countries,
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 as Norway or Finland, that could be considered among the richest of the world but that register low levels of
pollution
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. All in all, I believe that even if the past development was always correlated with increasing environmental issues, now it is possible to put in place some actions to
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.
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,
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 will be possible only with collaboration among countries already developed and developing countries: the former sh
ould made a
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should make
vailable new technologies to the latter.

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