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Writing Samples
Band 8

You and your family are living in rented accommodation in an English speaking country. You are not satisfied with the condition of some of the furniture. Write a letter to your landlord. In your letter introduce yourself explain what is wrong with the furniture say what action you would like the landlord to take You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear .................,

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Dear Ben, I hope
this
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 letter finds you well. My name is Joscelin, and I recently moved to Australia from Singapore. I have been renting your flat with my family for the past two weeks, and
overall
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, we are very pleased with the apartment.
However
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, I noticed some issues with the condition of the furniture that I would like to address.
Firstly
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, the Legs of the dining chairs are unstable, which increases the risk of someone falling.
Secondly
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, there are several stains on the living room sofa, which make it uncomfortable to sit on.
Lastly
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, there are noticeable scratches on the dining table. which may be
due to
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 the previous tenant. I would greatly appreciate it if you could arrange for either repairs or replacements for these items. I believe doing so would help improve the
overall
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 safety and comfort of the living space. I understand that arranging for a replacement takes time so if a replacement could not be done immediately, perhaps a temporary solution is possible. Thank you for your attention to the matter. I hope to hear from you soon. Kind regards, Joscelin

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coherence and cohesion
While your letter is generally well-structured, ensuring that each paragraph begins with a clear topic sentence could enhance clarity further, especially for the issues with the furniture.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to maintain consistent punctuation throughout, such as correcting the period after 'table' in the third paragraph to a comma for better flow.
tone
You have a warm and friendly tone in your greeting and closing, which is appropriate for this type of letter.
clarity
Your explanations of the issues with the furniture are clear and specific, helping the landlord understand your concerns.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Dear
  • I am writing to express my dissatisfaction
  • regarding
  • the condition
  • furniture
  • belongings
  • for instance
  • damaged
  • broken
  • worn-out
  • appliance
  • household items
  • it is unacceptable
  • inconvenient
  • inhabitable
  • affecting
  • negatively
  • urgent attention
  • replacement
  • repair
  • resolve
  • maintenance
  • prompt response
  • Thank you for your attention
  • Yours sincerely
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