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Some people think that the only way to have succes in business is to have unique product. What factors, do you think, influence the success of a company?

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There
are
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is
wide range
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a wide range
 of
product
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 available in the
market
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 and every supplier are
competiting
compete for something; engage in a contest; measure oneself against others
competing
 for their survival. Certain individual believe that the only way to
successful
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success
 in business is to have extraordinary items. In my opinion, I think price and the quality are the major factors influencing the
success
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 of an organisation.
To begin
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 with, People are thinking that creating
a
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an
unusal
not usual or common or ordinary
unusual
unusable
annual
product
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 and selling in the
market
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 will provide
success
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. But I think
this
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 cannot be a factor for consideration because the price of the produced
item
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 play a significant role in deciding the factor. People always do
comparison
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a comparison
 of the
item
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 with the available alternative
product
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 in the
market
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. If the replacement
product
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cost
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 less in comparison to the new launched
product
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 they will never buy the latest
product
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 and when the
product
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 is unsold it cannot be successful.
For instance
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,
ABC corportion
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an ABC corporation
ABC corporation
ABC corporations
 in India has invented a Soap and for creation it
cost
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 huge amount to the company. All the expenditure was included to
cost
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 of
unit
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the unit
a unit
units
.
This
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 soap has increased the price and people could not afford the new one.
Their
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There
 were no sales of
this
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item
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.
Furthermore
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, The
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
 reason for unusual
product
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 being
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success
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successful
 is the durability of the
product
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. Since the new
item
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 is created and launched in the
market
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 for the public. People are not aware of
this
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item
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 in relation to the quality.
Previously individual
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Previously, individual
 in the
market
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have never tried
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has never tried
this
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 as it was not aware to use it and
also
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 there are no review about the
product
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 from
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
. So that people can trust and buy
this
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product
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 to use it. Example of ABC
corportion
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india
a republic in the Asian subcontinent in southern Asia; second most populous country in the world; achieved independence from the United Kingdom in 1947
India
, Soap from
this
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 entity was made available to the public and people did not buy
this
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 as they do not have any
feed back
the process in which part of the output of a system is returned to its input in order to regulate its further output
feedback
 about the quality. It is completely new
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item wheather
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item, whether
item whether
item weather
 it is good or bad was never known and
hence
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 people avoided buying it. In conclusion, People though that extraordinary
product
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 will be
decide
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deciding
 the fate of the company, I completely disagree with the notion, I think
cost
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 of
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item
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the item
 and the durability are the most common factor in determining the
success
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 of the newly launched
product
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.
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