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The performance of the staff can have a significant impact on the success of a company. What can companies do to increase staff productivity?

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Corporate entities exist to make profit and that can only be done with collective
work
 from all the departments. The
work
 of an employee can have a great impact on the growth of the organisation. Staff can be encouraged by providing rise in packages and
also
 by
improvings
getting higher or more vigorous
improving
 working conditions.
To begin
 with, The employees in a
company
plays
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play
 vital role.
Employer
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The employer
An employer
 can increase productivity by increasing their salaries. Employees are given
fixed amount
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a fixed amount
 of pay for their daily task and they
work
 limited hours without any addition input. If
owner
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the owner
an owner
 of the
company
want
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wants
 to extract more output.
Then
 they should provide staff with an incentive, so that they can put an extra effort
in addition
 to their routine daily
work
.
For instance
, Mc
donald
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Donald
 food chain in
india
a republic in the Asian subcontinent in southern Asia; second most populous country in the world; achieved independence from the United Kingdom in 1947
India
 use to sell 100 nos of Hamburger and staff were given fixed monthly wages. The management decided to provide
addition bonus
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an added bonus
added bonus
 to the employees if they double the sales.
This
 how both staff and the owner of the organisation
where
have the quality of being; (copula, used with an adjective or a predicate noun)
were
 able to increase the employee productivity and revenue.
Furthermore
, In order to take more output from the workers of the
company
, the managers have provided staffs with good working environment. Employers removed the restriction of break and given freedom to employees to take regular gaps during the working hours in comparison to fixed two breaks during the day. The other move by the owner of the
company
 was to provide financial assistance to the worker in times of needs. Every person
have
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has
 ups and down in their life and employees are paid
certain amount
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a certain amount
 regularly and in case of emergencies they do not have backup to tackle
such
 situation.
Hence
 employers understand the needs and give option to help in needy employees.
For instance
,
ABC
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the ABC company employee
an ABC company employee
company
 employee
were offered
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was offered
 money
assitance
the activity of contributing to the fulfillment of a need or furtherance of an effort or purpose
assistance
 in case of
un
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a
an
forseen
a powerful effect or influence
forcing
 condition and
also
 flex working schedule as per they need
made
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to make
 them motivated towards
work
 and the performance of the
company
 enhance drastically. In conclusion, Workers of the
company
 can be motivated by providing an incentive
on
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to
work
 and
also
 by giving freedom to
work
 as per
convinece
the state of being suitable or opportune
convenience
convince
 and
also
 by assistance during
emergency situation
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emergency situations
an emergency situation
 by giving financial loans.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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