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The performance of the staff can have a significant impact on the success of a company. What can companies do to increase staff productivity?

Corporate entities exist to make profit and that can only be done with collective
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 from all the departments. The
work
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 of an employee can have a great impact on the growth of the organisation. Staff can be encouraged by providing rise in packages and
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 by improving working conditions.
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 with, The employees in a
company
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 play vital role. The Employer can increase productivity by increasing their salaries. Employees are given a fixed amount of pay for their daily task and they
work
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 limited hours without any addition input. If the owner of the
company
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 wants to extract more output.
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 they should provide staff with an incentive, so that they can put an extra effort
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 to their routine daily
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.
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, Mc Donald food chain in India use to sell 100 nos of Hamburger and staff were given fixed monthly wages. The management decided to provide an added bonus to the employees if they double the sales.
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 how both staff and the owner of the organisation were able to increase the employee productivity and revenue.
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, In order to take more output from the workers of the
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, the managers have provided staffs with good working environment. Employers removed the restriction of break and given freedom to employees to take regular gaps during the working hours in comparison to fixed two breaks during the day. The other move by the owner of the
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 was to provide financial assistance to the worker in times of needs. Every person has ups and down in their life and employees are paid a certain amount regularly and in case of emergencies they do not have backup to tackle
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 situation.
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 employers understand the needs and give option to help in needy employees.
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, The ABC
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 employee was offered money assistance in case of
unfourseen
not anticipated
unforeseen
 condition and
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 flex working schedule as per they need to make them motivated towards
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 and the performance of the
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 enhance drastically. In conclusion, Workers of the
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 can be motivated by providing an incentive to
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 and
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 by giving freedom to
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 as per convenience and
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 by
assistance
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the assistance
 during emergency situations by giving financial loans.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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