In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?

In some nations, people are getting heavier and standards of health and well-being are falling.
This
essay will suggest that the principal cause of these issues is the type of nourishment they are eating and submit a government education program as a viable solution, followed by a reasoned conclusion. The main cause of the health crisis currently affecting so many individuals is over-consumption of poor quality sustenance. Convenience
food
and junk
food
,
such
as microwave dinners, chocolate bars, McDonald’s and pizza, have become a ubiquitous part of modern life. Eating too much of these high-fat meals causes many to gain weight and
this
has knock-on effects on someone’s general wellness.
For example
, the movie ‘Super Size Me’ demonstrated that a person who eats
this
kind of
food
all the time will not only get
fat but
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fat, but
also
suffer from
such
things as raised blood pressure and even fatty liver disease. The most practical solution to
this
problem is a government-sponsored awareness campaign. An effective advertising campaign could warn of the dangers of a poor diet
and hopefully
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and, hopefully
, raise awareness amongst the public.
This
raised awareness of the problem would lead many people starting a healthier regime.
For example
, the U.K.
recently
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Recently
lobbied their citizens to eat 5 pieces of fruit and vegetables a day and
this
resulted in a dramatic decrease in obesity-related illnesses
such
as stroke and heart disease. In summary, the current health crisis has been caused by an over-reliance on unhealthy
food
and states should curtail
this
by educating men and women on how to make healthier choices.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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