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Is it good for children to start using computers from an early age and spend long hours on them? Discuss the advantages and disadvantages.

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 contemporary era expects everyone to be technologically literate and advanced. People from all the age groups are using latest gadgets and children are no exception to
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. But, many researchers are debating whether to allow children using computers since early childhood or not.
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 essay will discuss few merits and demerits of overusing
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 devices by stating some examples from the research done British University and WHO. On the one hand, technology has brought immense uses to
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 and made our life easy. These days almost all the services are available online,
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, to order food or to book movie ticket customers are using mobile phones and software application. Doing so is convenient and just a click away. To cope up and stand in the competitive
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 with a confidence, children should learn computers in early childhood.
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, it has been observed that they have strong grasping power and are a quick learner, which makes them to learn and adapt to the changes swiftly. British University published a paper, which states children have twice the learning capability as compared to adults.
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 research has shown the importance of learning in early ages.
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, overuse of technological devices
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 as computers, laptops, iPads and mobile phone may bring few problems to mankind.
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, spending uncountable hours in front of the screen may affect one's body posture and may cause strain on the eyes. The research held by WHO states that people who have sedentary work
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 as work in IT companies, are suffering from back pain and neck pain more as compared to others.
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 will be more serious, if they start spending too much time in front of the screen from school days.
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, websites
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 as Facebook, YouTube and Instangram are appealing and children found them more attractive, causing them to increasing their screen time about 30 hours per week.
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 will not only impact their studies and concentrating power, but
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 isolate them from
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. They may start lacking communication skills as they would prefer to discuss over the online medium
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 of meeting with their peers in person. Considering all the arguments and examples stated above, it is necessary to learn technology in earlier age to survive in the competitive
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;
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, one should not overuse. In the near future,
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 schools will be preferred online mediums to teach students as it is convenient, appealing and interesting, they must be concerned about their negative impacts and should take demerits into account.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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