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Government around the world are spending billions in support of space programs. This money would be better spent on research into improvements in human health. Do you agree or disagree?

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A small group of people argue that holding a job in a same
company
 for their entire life is a better option for employees.
However
, another group of the society says that it's more beneficial for workers through shifting companies provide job attainment.
This
eassy
an analytic or interpretive literary composition
essay
 will discuss both of the perspectives. On the one hand, employees would have
better career option
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better career options
a better career option
 in term of grabbing pensions if they contribute their whole life in a single organization. It provides
plethora
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a plethora
 of opportunities for workers; higher salary, pension facilities, omniscient and fully experienced regarding a particular
duties
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duty
. Pension is out and out important thing we can achieve through working only in a fixed
company
.
For instance
, my elder sister worked in a same
company
 for over 20 years and now she is rewarded and admired by many people and at a same time earning money even after her retirement.
On the other hand
, changing and collaborating with various companies plays significant role in order to make an individual highly skilled
,
Accept space
,
experienced and to outweigh the problems occurred by working in a same organization. If a person engaged with different field frequently
then
 he or she could gain immense knowledge about various sectors.
As a result
,
Accept space
,
 It assists them to deal with any challenges. Taking both
side
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sides
 into the consideration, I'd like to recapitulate that people are likely to work for
diff
 companies that could give them specific leverages to become fully experienced.
Nevertheless
, it is supposed that working
in
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with
 one
company
 for lifetime
create
Suggestion
creates
 their future more prosperous.
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