Nowadays public transport prices are constantly increasing. Why do you think this is happening? How can this problem be solved?
In recent years, increasing the
fare
of Fix the agreement mistake
fares
the
public Correct article usage
apply
transportation
is
a serious issue in many centres of cities all over the world. So, it would be meaningful to discuss why Wrong verb form
has been
such
a problem has occurred and to suggest how to deal with this
matter.
To begin
with, the workers
who work in transportation
industry are not offered proper wages and Add an article
the transportation
welfares
. Fix the agreement mistake
welfare
Also
, there are
not Correct subject-verb agreement
is
sufficient
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a sufficient
the
number of Correct article usage
apply
workers
performing in tubes, buses and trains. It naturally leads to Correct article usage
a raise
raise
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rise
the
fee for Change preposition
in the
transportation
on account of there are
a great deal of people Wrong verb form
being
talking
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taking
a public transport
, but Remove the article
public transport
a means of public transport
a mode of public transport
workers
working in various transportation
enterprises do not devote to
their duties in that they cannot be provided with the appropriate income as they spent a lot of time in working. In Korea, Correct pronoun usage
themselves to
for example
, it is not difficult to witness the
strike of Correct article usage
a
transportation'
employees, they cannot enjoy even on Change noun form
transportation
holiday
and Fix the agreement mistake
holidays
did
not get Wrong verb form
do
the
overworking payment, so Correct article usage
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that
numerous Correct word choice
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transportations
are inclined to Fix the agreement mistake
transportation
ascend
the Verb problem
raise
transportation
fee
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fees
due
to offer Change preposition
apply
more
Correct word choice
higher
salary
to their Fix the agreement mistake
salaries
workers
.
Under this
situation, I am firmly of the opinion that the power of the government is necessary. In the first place, the authorities should intervene in the transport corporations and invest a lot of revenue in workers
who had
undergone Wrong verb form
have
unfairness
welfare or did not get proper profits. In Replace the word
unfair
this
way, the citizens cannot feel uncomfortable anymore, including too long service interval
and do not need to pay for growing Fix the agreement mistake
intervals
fare
of Fix the agreement mistake
fares
talking
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apply
the
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transportations
, Fix the agreement mistake
transportation
as well as
the employees working in the public transportation
industry can labour enthusiastically and have responsibility for their obligations. For instance
, in the short run, the government should serve and increase worker'
earnings. It is imperative to dispose of their Fix the agreement mistake
workers'
profoundly
complaintsChange the adverb
profound
,
so that they can be able to keep working with Remove the comma
apply
pleasure
mind. Correct article usage
a pleasure
And in
the long run, the nations should make the Correct word choice
In
citizen
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citizens
awareness
that the employees who are in charge of their commuting loads Replace the word
aware
are
strive Unnecessary verb
apply
people'
security and they are desirable to get better Change preposition
for people'
payment
.
In conclusion, there are still severe causes and provocations which raise the Replace the word
pay
transportation'
fee. But, I am personally convinced that the government should tackle Correct your spelling
transportation
this
issue and take countermeasures sooner.Submitted by bibila1120 on
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The introduction and conclusion are present, but the body paragraphs lack coherent development. There is a need for more logical organization of ideas within and between paragraphs. Transition words and phrases should be used more effectively to enhance cohesion.
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