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Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of the following topic. When a country develops its technology, the traditional skills and ways of life die out. It is pointless to try and keep them alive. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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 technological progress is more and more inserting in our ordinary, accustomed life, what provides incredible opportunities in almost every area of our existing, many people concern about preserving unique traditions, customs, and even professions, which indicate and separate their nation from others. And I think
this
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 is really important to save the history of your own
country
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 to
next
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 generations and have an opportunity to show it on real examples. Let’s look what advantages it gives.
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, there are many historical places in different countries, where people try to keep the patterns of life,
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, of people having lived in the middle centuries.
Such
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 places are very attractive for tourists and allow to earn good money for the
country
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.
Secondly
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, it is amazing to see some historical events in real time
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with
 your own eyes. And many people work to give us
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 a wonderful capability, and we should be very grateful for them. It helps to develop the interest to the history of your
country
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, especially among children, and feel proud that you are a citizen of
this
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country
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, technological progress allows to replace some employees with robotic machines. And preserving some traditional professions and customs helps people to not be unemployed in
future
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the future
. I believe that technologies provide
great
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greater
 capabilities for humanity, but our task is to use them wisely, to preserve the unique history of our land for our children and help them to understand the importance of human’s life.
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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