Some modern artists receive huge sums of money for the things they create , while others struggle to survive . governments should take steps to resolve thiw unfair situation . To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The issue of huge emolument of artists has long been a controversial one
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There are those who claim that governments should resolve
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while others assume that there is need of funding some artists. In my point of view
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each profession
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earns
what it deserves, governments should only support the weakness of the system.
First
of all, we have to take into consideration that each artist sacrifice a lot of days to create a portrait
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and set all of his imagination and soul in each of his
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creations
. Leonardo da Vinci
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who painted the legendary masterpiece portrait ‘’Monalisa’’, took more than a year to finish it, but he got more than 2 billion dollars from selling his product,
for instance
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create
such
pieces every year.
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course, there
are professions that are not paid
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well, but
we
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compare them with art.
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ask from governments to take steps for
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‘’unfair’’ situation, we should ask
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for
them to give funds to whoever struggle
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including artists
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before it fulfilled. So, they deserve a high reward
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while governments should support
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the arts
by funds where it is necessary.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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