Obesity is an increasing public health related problem in some parts of the world. Explain some possible reasons for this problem, and suggest some solutions.

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In recent years, the increasing number of
obesity
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is becoming a serious social issue all over the globe. So, it would be meaningful to discuss why
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a problem has occurred and to suggest
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in what way or manner or by what means
how
to deal with
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matter. In the
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place, it is needless to say that an
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addict
of computer and mobile phone are highly likely to gain the overweigh than other people in that
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people commonly used to the sedentary lifestyle, and they
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weren't even trying
even weren't trying
even were not trying
even did not try
even didn't try
even were not tried
to work out. According to a recent survey, the growing number of people spend their time in playing computer games
or watching
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or, watching
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' at least more three times in a day. In
natrually
as might be expected
naturally
leads people to become fat and has unhealthy habits.
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, due to people'
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being long-lasting and recurrent or characterized by long suffering
chronic
busyness, many people enjoy having the fast
food
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and canned
food
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than making
food
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at their home in a healthy way. They do not
havve
have or possess, either in a concrete or an abstract sense
have
sufficient time of cooking themselves with healthy ingredients. Many individuals are highly likely to choose the fast
food
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despite they already knew it has harmful effects on their health and make them
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obesity
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obese
. Under
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situation, I firmly of the opinion that the power of the government is necessary.
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, several authorities
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which
have undergone the increases of the citizen'
obesity
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rate should frequently release the advertising about how important the regular exercise habits and how to prevent of being
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obesity
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obese
. In
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way, people are highly likely to be stimulated by the propaganda and to discourage the citizen from consuming from a lot of sugar-additive foods. Another point worth mentioning is that the government should build the gym-related infrastructures. As widely reported, many people have difficulties in exercising due to the weather' condition as well as the gym classes are not economic prices, and they do not want to spend a lot of money on
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gym institutions. So, it cannot help establishing the gym buildings which
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are
cleaner, wider and reasonable costs.
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a lot
of people will register
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people will register
and
do exercising
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exercise
for their health in that they do not need to struggle with the weather and high expense. In conclusion, there are several causes and provocations which
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can raise
weigh of people. But, I am personally convinced that the government should tackle
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this matters
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these matters
this matter
and take countermeasures in an effective way.
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