Some people think that news and media are affecting our life in a positive way while others disagree. What is your opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include examples from your own experience.

In the fast changing world, news and media play a crucial role in people’s lives. Some p
eople including
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people, including
me argue that our lives are affected positively by various a
rray
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arrays
of media and news, whereas, the others do not share
this
opinion. In the modern society today, w
inners
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the winners
are those who take advantage of every opportunity, it is not about knowing at all, every person who knows earlier is more likely to win.
For example
, the apple’s share in the stock market
last
year has soared by 20 per cent after Steve Jobs introduce the advanced model that the company has brought out. Obviously, the traders who did not predict that missed the boat.
In addition
, access to a bunch of educational video-clips and papers are provided by developing media and related substructures around the globe. Each phenomenon as pervasive as media and news
on the other hand
, have potentially d
anger
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dangerous
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or
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to
humankind indeed. One of the drawbacks which people are faced with is a bunch of uncontrolled violence content in different media.
For instance
, result from a survey in Kermanshah indicates that more than half of juveniles living in Kermanshah are severely traumatized by violence in diverse advertisement.
Moreover
, people in 20th century experienced the new problem called “Fake News”.
This
issue could drive people to lose their trust and
consequently
, lead toward more psychological disorders which would be costly for governments. To sum up, I could not agree more with people who argue that the media and news have p
ositive effect
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a positive effect
on our lives by providing more ways to the success o
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of
our own careers and even education,
however
there could be a few bad p
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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