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There should be laws to control the amount and type of violence shown on television programs. To what extent do u agree/ disagree with this statement.

#laws #control #amount #type #violence #television #programs
It is true that there is violence on
TV
. But it is up to individual choice to watch it or not and I disagree with
this
 point of view. Fortunately, we are all free to choose which
TV
 shows we want to watch. Laws are not really necessary to help us decide. IT is
,
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,
not difficult to find what type of programs is airing on
TV
 at any point of time. Most of the newspapers give information on
TV
 programs along with their schedule.
Also
 Anyone who watches
TV
 programs regularly, he or she knows what kind of shows are airing on. Because of
this
 it is easy to avoid programs which are inappropriate on
TV
. Modern technology has given us a tool for control and monitor programs we see. There is a feature like block a channel which is inappropriate to watch.
Thus parents
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Thus, parents
 can protect themselves Children from seeing the shows that are too violent. Adults can
also
 use
this
 technology to avoid showing, that they don't want to see. The best thing about
TV
 is, It has a variety of programs
for instance
 news programs for serious people
,
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,
cartoon and movies for those who want to be entertained, sports programs for game lovers. The variety of shows need to be protected if they show some violence . We each have own ideas about what is too violent and what isn't. It would be difficult to make laws that would satisfy everyone. It is better to let an individual make their decision.
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