Some people believe that teenagers should concentrate on all school subjects. But others believe that teenagers should focus on the subject that they are good at or they find most interest. To what extend do you agree or disagree.

Nowadays there are myriad kinds of subjects that teenagers can learn it in
school
.
In addition
, it is well known that teenagers must give their best to all
school
subjects.
In contrast
, teenagers should focus on the subject that they like it. I strongly believe that I have different views regarding the statement that say teenagers need to emphasize on all
school
subjects.
To begin
with, if children are learning all
school
subjects I believe they can make their brain exhausted.
Moreover
, not merely their brain that will suffer, but
also
their body too. There was a survey conducted by an array of sociology students from the Monash University in 2012. From the survey they found out that
majority
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the majority
a majority
of teenagers in Melbourne feel frustrated, and
also
majority
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the majority
of them are suffering mental anxiety because of learning subjects that they do not like. The
next
, learning all of
school
subjects are not beneficial enough and we will not utilize all of them.
For example
; currently I merely focus on chemistry, mathematics, and English because I want to take pharmacology science as my major in the university. I will not say that other subjects are not vital enough, but
instead
learning minor subjects
such
as; history, civics, and others, we can emphasize our focus more wider on our major subjects that we will take it as our guidance in the future. All in all, as a
parents we
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parent, we
parent we
must let our children choose their own subjects.
Therefore
, they can sharpen their skills more often,
consequently
, they can be what they wanted to be

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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