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It is generally believed that the Internet is an excellent means of communication but some people suggest that it may not be the best place to find information. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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One of the best achievements of the end of the 20th century has become the creation of the
World
 Wide
Web
. Humankind had never before had
such
 an easy and comfortable way to communicate with each other from any place in the
world
. The invention of the
Internet
 has
also
 brought the opportunity to find the
answer
 to almost any question, but is the
information
 from the global network
are
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always undoubtful? Today,
people
 can find practically any material for their study or work on the
Internet
.
For instance
, the biggest online encyclopedia Wikipedia can provide a lot of articles that
answer
for
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almost every common question in
near
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 any language. Another famous
web
-portal YouTube has billions of videos on any topic, not only for educational purposes but for entertainment,
also
. Another excellent example of a valuable
Internet
 portal is TheAudioguide, where everybody can find the audio version of most
of
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the
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books from all countries of the planet and any period of human history.
However
, the
World
 Wide
Web
 is not a reference book written by
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people
. It consists of many sorts of
information
, which include both
the
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validated
scientifical
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 articles and posts from ordinary
people
 who express their
opinion
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, often without enough or any competence in the particular theme.
Furthermore
, everything that was once put on the
Internet
 stays on the
Internet
 forever, and the amount of
information
 stored on the
Web
 continually and exponentially grows each year.
Thus
, sometimes it is challenging to find the correct
answer
 in the ocean of opinions of
people
 from all over the
world
. From my point of view, the
Internet
 provides us
the
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 simplest way to find the correct
answer
 to almost every common question, but,
on the contrary
, it is impossible to find the solution for complicated or conflicted problems just
through
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 searching the
Web
 because there is a lot of irrelevant
information
 that was put in the global network by incompetent
people
.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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