The qualities and skills that a person requires to become successful in today's world cannot be learned at a university or other academic institutions. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that universities or colleges cannot teach people some skills to make them successful.
This
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disagree
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disagrees
with
this
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point because
firstly
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, academic institutions
build
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builds
the basic
knowledge
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system in
students
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students'
student's
mind which is helpful for their
future
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and
secondly
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, high
education
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raise people's average social statues as the whole. Universities can support learners a series of
theoratical
concerned primarily with theories or hypotheses rather than practical considerations
theoretical
vertical
theoretically
knowledge
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sturcture
a thing constructed; a complex entity constructed of many parts
structure
in a short term, which will be useful for
individual
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the individual
an individual
individuals
in his or her
future
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life.
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many concepts and
knowledge
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points seem to be useless at the moment, those theories will accumulate in learners' mind and would bring the benefits in sometime in the
future
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.
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, Lee Chengk, a successful
bussessman
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in China who run a lot of amazing
resturants
a building where people go to eat
restaurants
, expressed that he applied the method of
quantititive
expressible as a quantity or relating to or susceptible of measurement
quantitative
research in his
resturant
a building where people go to eat
restaurant
restaurants
to statistic and match the most suitable food with the costumers with the
change
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changing
seasons and different time of a day and a week in order to maximise the benefits of his
resturant
a building where people go to eat
restaurant
restaurants
restraint
at the
begining
the event consisting of the start of something
beginning
of his career.
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type of thinking is hard for people who do not have high
education
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to get.
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,
systemitical
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systematic
systematically
systematical
education
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can increase the people's average social statues from a macro perspective. Someone could argue that there are some people who leave out the universities before they
gratitute
a feeling of thankfulness and appreciation
gratitude
, and they are very successful
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as Bill Gates and Mark Zuckerberg.
However
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, personal examples cannot cover every case in the world. There are many people who suffer the poverty, hunger, long working time and huge workloads. According to a statistic from
Chinese
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the Chinese education department
education
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department, one higher
education
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degree can bring 20% of
increase
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the increase
of the income for a person generally. In conclusion, I strongly disagree that academic institutes cannot bring some advantages that make students to be successful in the
future
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, because university
education
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can
estabilish
set up or found
establish
established
a mature
knowledge
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sturcture
a thing constructed; a complex entity constructed of many parts
structure
for learners and can raise people's social statues from the macro view.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Real-world experience
  • Adaptability
  • Resilience
  • Networking
  • Interpersonal skills
  • Creative thinking
  • Innovation
  • Self-learning
  • Continuous improvement
  • Emotional intelligence
  • Empathy
  • Traditional academic settings
  • Academic curricula
  • Structured nature
  • Lifelong learning
  • Rapidly changing industries
  • Leadership
  • Teamwork
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