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The qualities and skills that a person requires to become successful in today's world cannot be learned at a university or other academic institutions. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that universities or colleges cannot teach people some skills to make them successful.
This
 essay
disagree
Suggestion
disagrees
 with
this
 point because
firstly
, academic institutions
build
Suggestion
builds
 the basic
knowledge
 system in
students
Suggestion
students'
student's
 mind which is helpful for their
future
 and
secondly
, high
education
 raise people's average social statues as the whole. Universities can support learners a series of
theoratical
concerned primarily with theories or hypotheses rather than practical considerations
theoretical
vertical
theoretically
knowledge
sturcture
a thing constructed; a complex entity constructed of many parts
structure
 in a short term, which will be useful for
individual
Suggestion
the individual
an individual
individuals
 in his or her
future
 life.
Although
 many concepts and
knowledge
 points seem to be useless at the moment, those theories will accumulate in learners' mind and would bring the benefits in sometime in the
future
.
For example
, Lee Chengk, a successful
bussessman
 in China who run a lot of amazing
resturants
a building where people go to eat
restaurants
, expressed that he applied the method of
quantititive
expressible as a quantity or relating to or susceptible of measurement
quantitative
 research in his
resturant
a building where people go to eat
restaurant
restaurants
 to statistic and match the most suitable food with the costumers with the
change
Suggestion
changing
 seasons and different time of a day and a week in order to maximise the benefits of his
resturant
a building where people go to eat
restaurant
restaurants
restraint
 at the
begining
the event consisting of the start of something
beginning
 of his career.
This
 type of thinking is hard for people who do not have high
education
 to get.
In addition
,
systemitical
Suggestion
systematic
systematically
systematical
education
 can increase the people's average social statues from a macro perspective. Someone could argue that there are some people who leave out the universities before they
gratitute
a feeling of thankfulness and appreciation
gratitude
, and they are very successful
such
 as Bill Gates and Mark Zuckerberg.
However
, personal examples cannot cover every case in the world. There are many people who suffer the poverty, hunger, long working time and huge workloads. According to a statistic from
Chinese
Suggestion
the Chinese education department
education
 department, one higher
education
 degree can bring 20% of
increase
Suggestion
the increase
 of the income for a person generally. In conclusion, I strongly disagree that academic institutes cannot bring some advantages that make students to be successful in the
future
, because university
education
 can
estabilish
set up or found
establish
established
 a mature
knowledge
sturcture
a thing constructed; a complex entity constructed of many parts
structure
 for learners and can raise people's social statues from the macro view.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Real-world experience
  • Adaptability
  • Resilience
  • Networking
  • Interpersonal skills
  • Creative thinking
  • Innovation
  • Self-learning
  • Continuous improvement
  • Emotional intelligence
  • Empathy
  • Traditional academic settings
  • Academic curricula
  • Structured nature
  • Lifelong learning
  • Rapidly changing industries
  • Leadership
  • Teamwork
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