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In some parts of the world it is becoming popular to research the history of one's own family. Why might people want to do this? Is it a positive or negative development?

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Nowadays, people in some countries of the world, show a keen interest in studying their family history.
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 development has an
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 positive impact. Some of the reasons why people do
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, knowing
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's family background is extremely important from the medical perspective, as there are certain diseases which run in
families
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neurological disorders like Huntington's chorea and Friedrich's ataxia are hereditary diseases. If we know about our family history, we can easily avoid cousin marriages and protect our
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 from these debilitating illnesses.
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, the research about
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's family helps to clarify the reasons
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 conflicts between the family members.
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 provides an opportunity for the younger generation to avoid the mistakes made by their ancestors and live peacefully. There are many ways by which, knowing
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's past, proves to be beneficial. First of all, when we get the idea of the diseases running in the
families
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, we get a chance to stay away from family marriages and stop the transfer of those genes.
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, the transfer of blood disorders like
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Thalassemia
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 genes.
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, the positive traits of our grandparents and
great grandparents
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 could be adopted to lead a successful life, if we know our past.
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 the way they
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 their children to stick together against all the odds, would serve as a light to enlighten our paths and help us teach our children to follow the same.
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 the research of our past could be a blessing for the
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, because they can be saved from being handicapped and dependant on others.
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,
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 can learn from the horrible mistakes of our forefathers, that ended up in the break up of the
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 and could modify oneself and live at peace.

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task achievement
Ensure that each body paragraph addresses a specific aspect of the topic and directly responds to the essay prompt. Expand on the reasons for studying family history and its impact on individuals and society.
coherence and cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are present, providing a clear overview and summary of the main points. Consider varying sentence structures and using transition words to improve the flow of ideas.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Genealogy
  • Heritage
  • Ancestry
  • Lineage
  • Descendants
  • Forebears
  • Pedigree
  • Dynasty
  • Progenitors
  • Ethnicity
  • Genetic predisposition
  • Familial ties
  • Archival records
  • Hereditary
  • Kinship
  • Self-identity
  • Patriarchy/Matriarchy
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