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Some people think that the best way to improve road safety is to increase the minimum legal age for driving a car or motorbike. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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An
nually many p
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Annually, many
eople lost their lives due to motor vehicle accidents ;
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;
therefore
, it is necessary for governments worldwide to apply proper strategies to keep
this
 fi
gure low.
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low figure
Some people suggest that governments should in
creasing t
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increase
he minimum legal
age
 to obtain legal
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ive l
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drivers
icense in od
er t
(often plural) a command given by a superior (e.g., a military or law enforcement officer) that must be obeyed
order
o enhance road safety. I partially agree with
this
 suggestion and the essay will discuss my view.
To begin
 with, increasing mi
nimum
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the minimum age
age
 for be
e
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being
ligible to obtain a driving license is crucial to promote safe driving worldwide.
Firstly
, pr
oper mental capacity f
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the proper mental capacity
or driving is one of ne
cessary elements f
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the necessary elements
or safety driving. Teenagers tend to have fragile mental capacities which make them high-risk drivers. Only when they mature enough and have a better capacities to control their mood, they are allowed to
drive
 independently.
Moreover
, with the industrialization, road conditions tend to become more complex than that in the past over the world, especially in inner cities.
This
 requires all drivers’ capacity to stay calm during driving.
Therefore
, the current mi
nimun l
the least possible
minimum
egal
age
 for teenagers may be not proper and increasing the
age
 will be a must to make sure that all teenagers have right capacities to
drive
 .
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.
For example
, in Canada, teenagers are allowed to
drive
 legally at the
age
 of 16 ye
ar o
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years
ld with restriction.
However
,
this
age
 teenagers remain lack of logic thinking capacity and may
also
 put them at high risk to involve into car accidents.
Therefore
, incasing the
age
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1
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of
8 ye
ar o
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years
ld should be considered in Canada.
In addition
, nowadays, teenagers ar
e facing m
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face
ore challenges during their daily life activities due to the more complicated living environment. They tend to be vulnerable to nurture negative habits
such
 drinking or doing drugs before driving,
This
 may be re
sult f
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the result
a result
rom that they are lack of proper logical thinking skills before they mature enough to make right decisions.
Moreover
, mental
health
 issues are much common among contemporary population including teenagers.
Therefore
, mental
health
 issues
al
so causes d
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also cause
have also caused
are also causing
etrimental efficacy on their fitness for driving.
Finally
, the minimum legal
age
 should be various in terms of individual national living environment.
For example
, in Chinese metropolitans, being 18 ye
ar o
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years
ld is a must cr
iterium f
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Criterium
or the
youth
 to attend driving school and test because of Chinese complex and crowed living environment. If the
youth
 ha
ve suffered f
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has suffered
rom mental
health
 issues, the proper
age
 that allows them to
drive
 legally should be increased in order to protect the public. In conclusion, in order to keep motor vehicle accident as lo
west a
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low
s possible to promote safe driving, setting proper legal
age
 fo
r t
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of
he
youth
 is crucial. The governments around the world should establish pr
oper legal
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a proper legal age
age
 for the
youth
’s qualification of driving. At least 18 years old is a reasonable
age
 for the
he
alth
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health, youth
youth
; while, for the ones with mental
health
 issues, the legal ages to
drive
 should be increased due to the above reasons. Proper driving rules will enhance national happiness of the public.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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