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Some people say modern innovations bring a lot of problems than benefits. Do you agree or disagree ?

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A modern innovation is anything technological device which makes our life simpler. In my opinion modern innovations bring more benefits than problems so I disagree with the opposite idea. In the case of e-shopping which now day is very popular in our society. It allows to buy anything that you need in less than two minutes through internet and it is pretty simple.
Furthermore you
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 could get access to products that are not available in your city or country, in my case I am used to buy computer science books that are not available in Ireland or sometimes when my budget allows me I buy some electronic stuff related to IOT (Internet of Things). Another modern innovation is the smartphone, which everybody needs and makes our lives simpler, allowing us to do almost everything
for example
, accessing to our emails, chatting with any of your friend or family members wherever you are, booking a taxi, buying flight tickets, GPS navigation, e-shopping and so on. Indeed a modern innovation
such
 as the smartphone is very handy it creates a feeling in us that we cannot live without it and despite of the fact that it connects us it
also
 makes people to live in a more isolated way. To conclude modern innovations bring us many benefits and it will bring more in the foreseeable future, but we have to be responsible about how to use those innovations.
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