Government financial aid for students should be based solely on merit.

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based on
merit
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turns education from a right available to all students into a privilege primarily for the wealthy. "[T
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of
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is associated with a decrease in
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of low-
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and minority students."
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quote from a study done by Amanda L. Griffith, a professor of economics at Wake Forest University, was cited in a statement calling for an end to
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based financial
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which was issued by a group of private
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presidents (Gardner). Making financial
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entirely dependent upon
merit
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makes
college
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education even more
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and race entitled (and biased) than it is already. As Catherine Rampell wrote, “
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metrics like SAT scores tend to closely correlate with family
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; about 1 in 5 students from households with
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over $250,000 receives
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aid
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from his or her school. For families making less than $30,000, it’s 1 in 10” (Rampell). Basing financial
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for students on "
merit
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" serves to lock low-
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people into poverty; regardless of whether it was intended or not,
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-based financing
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has racial and gender bias.
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, the very term
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based is misleading. As Chelsea Jones put it, “There is a
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in a term commonly used in higher education:
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aid
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’ implies
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or worthy of praise, but unfortunately, in
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context,
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is often synonymous with privilege.” The truth is, many low
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students who cannot obtain
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-based scholarships are just as smart as their higher
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counterparts who can get the
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-based financial
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but they happen to be unable to take part in the various extracurricular activities that play a big role in determining whether they are a star candidate for a
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-based scholarship or not. A low-
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student
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not only might not have the ability to attend extracurricular activities depending on where her or his school is located, they might
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have to
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part-
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just to make ends meet even if their school had those opportunities (Jones).
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, are students with disabilities that make it difficult or impossible to participate in extracurricular activities, going to be less able to secure
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based financial
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?
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, single mothers who have one child or more to take care of,
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to
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and possibly
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as well, would be unfairly impacted by a decision to make government financial
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for
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's
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based.
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would, and already does, make it gender biased. That, in combination with the fact that women who are equally qualified still tend to get paid less than men for the same jobs, makes
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sexist. While the amount of money
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dedicated to
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based financial
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increases, the amount of money available for need based financial
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proportionately decreases.
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, while the amount of
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based financial
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increases, the number of students who receive need-based
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decreases - IE Pell Grant. The result is fewer black students on the campus: Griffith, an assistant professor of economics at Wake Forest University, found that “the
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of
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aid
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is associated with changes in the socioeconomic and racial composition of the
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student
body.” According to the report, within three to five years of introducing a
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program, the two top tiers of private colleges saw their share of Pell Grant
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fall by 6 percentage points. At bottom-tier schools, the proportion of Pell Grant recipients
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rose but
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rose, but
ultimately dropped by 2 percentage points within 10 years of the creation of
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a program. The study
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found that the introduction of a
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aid
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program led to a reduction in the representation of black students at top-tier schools (
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Burd 5). Another problem with
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based financial
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is that colleges and universities are dedicating a lot of resources to attracting “desirable” students who are high scoring and have high achievements.
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is all to enhance the university's prestige. But what of everyone else? What of those who have disabilities or those who must help take care of siblings or other relatives with disabilities? What of the students who have to
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part
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or even full
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to get by and are not able to spend as much
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on their
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work
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as they would like, or as their
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work
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really requires, having lower grades
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? What of the LGBTQ students of
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color
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? David Johns, executive director of the National Black Justice Coalition, (a civil rights organization focused on the empowerment of LGBTQ people) and former executive director of the White House Initiative on Educational Excellence for African Americans, summarized it by saying: The ability for postsecondary institutions to provide credentials, certificates and degrees that are required for certain types of jobs are
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stratified or
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marginalizing individuals who are from communities that are most under supported or least likely to have access to the high-quality schools…without need-based financial
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based only for them would effectively shut them out. Statistically speaking, there is plenty of evidence showing that white students are
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likely to receive
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based financial
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than students of
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color
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colour
(Racial Breakdown of Financial
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). At the same
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, black and Chicana people earn less than white people do (Kochhar and Cilluffo). Taken together, making financial
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merit
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based only serves to
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entrap people of
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color
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in a vicious cycle of poverty and inequality. It is white supremacist regardless of whether
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the intent of those who trying to implement it. In a country that disproportionately incarcerates people of
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color
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, people who get out of prison and want to try to restart their lives by getting a
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degree will find it much more difficult to do so in Georgia which has absolutely no need based financial
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. All financial
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aid there
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aid, there
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based (Total Grant
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Awarded). In conclusion, making government financial
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for students based solely on
merit
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has already been shown to be an unmitigated disaster for the low
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, disabled, working mothers and people of
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color
a visual attribute of things that results from the light they emit or transmit or reflect
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. It amounts to educational apartheid and as already stated, it means that government
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aid
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pretty much becomes available only to those who least need it. To
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Catherine Rampell, who is quoting Mark Kantrowitz, the publisher at Edvisors.
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students, the six year graduation rate is 45 percent when grants cover one quarter
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costs but
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costs, but
it goes up to 68 percent when grants cover three fourths of the
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cost; Looking at the statistics for high
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students though, the graduation rates are about 78 percent either way.
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based financing has
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been shown to cause lower
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attendance for non-white students. Education should be viewed as a right and not a privilege,
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therefore therefore
not only must we no longer consider
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financial
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programs, we must go
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, enact federal laws which prohibit states from using
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based financial
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aid
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programs and force the states that are using
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based financial
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to immediately discontinue that practice and return the
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of need based financial
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. Works Cited “A Racial Breakdown of Financial
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”, The Journal of Blacks in Higher Education, 23 October, 2011, Accessed 29 January, 2020
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