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Some people believe that children's time outside should be filled with scheduled activities such as art and music classes and sports. Others feel that children need free time to play and relax.

Many children or teenagers have been advanced nowadays.
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, having a fixed schedule in daily routine life is made men perfect who wants to achieve their goal of doing some extra activities.
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, some individuals said, children can feel free after his or her school hours, so they have to use it to stay home with family or taking a valuable nape. I support the former view with the details rather than the
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 given statement. The daily routine activities that describe the extra talent in the children having
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 of only the academic skills and knowledge. Even more, it will help them to achieve some extraordinary achievements in
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 competitive society.
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, they could get the chance to refresh their minds and robust
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 energy out of the educational environment. If today's generation joins the extra curriculum classes before or after school period, they can show up their ability to do extra achievements in the world.
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, joining drawing classes or dancing classes that help to gain their hobby's skill of that child. As far as, they could able to enjoy their hobby, parents should focus on their children's interesting hobby's activities. On the other side, the students who doesn't interested to do some extra
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 of the educational activities,
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 the family time is the best option for them.
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, joining a family clock, especially with the grandparents is the best choice for them. So, they can learn something new from their grand guardian's stories and they can teach something in their daily lifestyle.
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, some grandparents
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 like to tell a story to his grandson so either, both the way they can enjoy their life and live a happy life in society. In the results, even though, the children have been interested to bust up their skills or hobbies in the future, it will help them to achieve extraordinary achievements and give the challenging competitions to others.
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 of sitting at home and passing the valuable clocking with a relaxing mood the good skills are the best option in today's advanced world.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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