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The chart below gives information about the number of social networking sites people used in Canada in 2014 and 2015.

The chart below gives information about the number of social networking sites people used in Canada in 2014 and 2015.
#information #sites #people #canada
This
 bar chart shows the number of social networking
sites
 visited by internet users
Canada
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 in 2014 and
in
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2015.
Overall
, we can see from the data that, in general, there
were
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 a growing
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tendency
 to use more
then
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 one site.
Although
 just over
one fifth
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 of internet
user
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users
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did not use any social
netwroking
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networking
sites
 in either of the years, the proportion in
this
 category decreased from 22
percent
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per cent
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 in 2014 to 21
percent
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per cent
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 in 2015. In both years the highest proportion of users in any group fell into the 'one site' Category.
However
,
this
 group declined sharply from 36
percent
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per cent
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 in 2014 to 28
percent
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per cent
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 in 2015.
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 contrast, the number who reported using two
sites
, three
sites
, four
sites
 and five
sites
 all grew over
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the
 period analysed In both years the proportion of
inernet
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internet
 users fell as
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the
 number of social networking
sites
 increased, with only 2
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 using five
sites
 in 2014 compared to 4
percent
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 in 2015.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sites, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • chart overview
  • social networking sites
  • trends
  • adoption
  • comparison
  • significant changes
  • segment
  • growth or reduction
  • social media habits
  • patterns
  • multi-platform usage
  • decline
  • non-users
  • conclusion
  • digital communication
  • social media marketing
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