The bar chart gives information about the number of car journeys into the city centre made by residents and non-residents.

The bar chart gives information about the number of car journeys into the city centre made by residents and non-residents.
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rendered chart illustrates the number of car
journeys
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into the
city
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centre
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by
who
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those who
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live
by
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in
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the town
centre
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And
non-
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residents
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in midst of the
year
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years
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1996 and 2005.
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, between 1996 and 1999
residents
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, most visited the heart of
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city
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the city
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,
whereas
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, from 2000 to 2002
non-
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residents
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did more car
journeys
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into the
city
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centre
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.
In
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the start of the era, over 900
residents
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had a journey to
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city
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the city
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centre
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per day,
whereas
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, only 5000
non-
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residents
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take
a
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the
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road to
central
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the central
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city
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and until 1999 there
were
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an up and down in the
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residents
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resident's
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tour but
non-
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residents
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journeys
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had a
dramatically
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increase.
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,
1999
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in 1999
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residents
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visiting decreased unexpectedly In 2000 to 5000
journeys
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regularly.
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in 2004
number
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the number
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of resident visitors
reached
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who reached
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the
city
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centre
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was 4000 per day, and slightly less than 4000 for
nonresidents
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non-residents
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. Importantly, between the
year
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years
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1999 and 2000 parking meters were assembled in the
centre
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of
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city
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the city
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.
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three years later Westgate street and Park lane were forbidden to traffic
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the sixth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words journeys, city, centre, non-residents, residents with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the sixth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend analysis
  • residents
  • non-residents
  • urban planning
  • traffic management
  • regulate
  • measures
  • impact
  • increase
  • decrease
  • compare
  • explore
  • evaluate
  • potential
  • journey
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