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Write about the following topic. The internet has greatly increased our access to information. To what extent do you think this is a good thing? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Automation has increased a lot compared to the past ten years and it will be going beyond our expectations in the future.With advancement in the machinery, huge amount of information can be easily shared towards any point across the world. Nowadays there is no problem in transferring or receiving the message.Without a doubt we are enjoying a high speed data transmission across the world with less time. Comparison to the past with present there is a lot of change happen and machinery. Along with the good there is some harm hidden with technology.
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, I would like to share one of my experiences. When I was ten years old, I used to go to the ground along with my friends. In that instance, we found lots of birds chirping and a huge flock of birds was flying in the sky, the shadow of that giant group of birds is reflected on the ground and we played under it. Whenever we go there was lots of greenery around us, which is like a treat to the eyes. It makes our hearts overwhelming with joy.Whereas a sound of one bird cannot be heard now, it is just because the greedy to make of the automation far better. I conclude, everything which is over the boundaries is not needed, it could be so better if we share the place with the small creatures around us as well.
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