Prompt: Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve the growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? what other measures do you think might be effective?
It’s inarguably that in
this
society of constant innovation yet myriad issues and the rising need for itineration and mobility, transportation is essential in one’s life. Linking Words
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, chaotic and ungovernable Linking Words
traffic
is a conspicuous problem that needs to be tackled, especially when nowadays innovation encourages the use and prompts the normalization of personalized Use synonyms
vehicles
in every household worldwide. Use synonyms
Thus
, the prominent idea of elevating the price of fuels for Linking Words
such
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vehicles
is considered the best way to solve the growing Use synonyms
traffic
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However
, I believe that Linking Words
this
is not the case and I will propose other effective measures based on my experience.
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Initially
, I disagree with the pronounced premise that increasing the price of petrol will augment the status of our general Linking Words
traffic
well-being for various factors. Use synonyms
Firstly
, the ubiquitous use of petrol, in general, is virtually irreplaceable and plays an imperative role not only in fuel Linking Words
vehicles
but in numerous factories and production Use synonyms
maneuvers
, energy generators, and alternative fuels for coal, concerning their emission products Change the spelling
manoeuvres
such
as the predetermined carbon dioxide in the Linking Words
air
. Use synonyms
Thus
, the increasing price of petroleum could potentially worsen the Linking Words
air
well-being for economic means simultaneously causing inflation in the economy, discouraging others from working, and significantly affecting the overseas goods’ transportation industry.
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However
, myriad ideas have been pronounced to tackle Linking Words
such
issues. Linking Words
Such
statements would be predominantly regarding the fragmented yet united contribution of each citizen and government power. For individuals, encouraging their Linking Words
demeanors
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demeanours
traffic
is essential, especially for developing and underdeveloped countries, ranging from establishing campaigns for raising each citizen’s awareness of Use synonyms
traffic
that entails Use synonyms
pollution
, accidents, and future well-being if no actions are taken, to teaching children about the imperativeness of regulative Use synonyms
traffic
. For the government, with sufficient funds, adding more novel routes or expanding old roads could significantly reduce Use synonyms
traffic
jams and Use synonyms
pollution
, or encourage the use of electrical or hybrid Use synonyms
vehicles
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optimization of Linking Words
air
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pollution
reduction.
In conclusion, since petroleum plays a quite significant contribution toward our society and is not easy to forgo or ban, numerous statements to address those Use synonyms
such
issues have been picked up or hypothesized toward individuals and the general government systems, and if the progress continues, the plateau or the augmentation of Linking Words
air
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pollution
would occur.Use synonyms
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