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In many places, shopping is the leisure time activity for young adults. Why is it so? Do you think it is a negative or a positive development?

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People around the globe go shopping at one of their leisure activities. There are many other things to do in free space enjoy listening music, playing games, watching TV and spending the day with family and loved ones. Mostly, these days, almost every individual is engaged in the respective works where they could not find any space to spend with their family, friends or loved ones. The moment with no task is very rare, so when working people get that seconds they might go out with their loved ones and make them free from the job pressure.
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, when it comes to the people, who are not working or who were not engaged in the production at least for once, would have lots of points so they might have thought to kill the pace and they opt shopping. As same as a coin has two sides, everything has its pros and cons. Shopping may increase the skills you have to make up yourself. Making up is an art. Look for one particular thing all sensors will work more efficiently. In the same way, when you look for your desired cloth or suit all your senses will perform attentively. Being conscious in making up yourself for a better appearance is a good thing, and it has not to go beyond the limits. Likely, when you go on wasting life in the shopping, it might not make any sense. The more shopping in the most money to spend if you do not find the dress you want, you would probably get depressed. How to spend any day is in our hands. I suggest you have a healthy break, and it fetches you some gallons of memories.
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