Some people argue that technological inventions, such as mobile phones, are making people socially less interactive. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is discussed that the advent of smart phones is bringing people to be less sociable. I personally agree with

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statement because now we become more and more

dipendent

relying on or requiring a person or thing for support, supply, or what is needed

dependent

dependant

despondent

by our technical devices and with the introduction of social platform like

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we now have

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created

a fake reality that bring us to interact less.

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of all, in

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days

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we can see that almost everyone as a smart phone and

sometime

on certain occasions or in certain cases but not always

sometimes

even more than one. Because of

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we can see that people is almost

hipnotized

having your attention fixated as though by a spell

hypnotized

hypnotised

by their devices, and most of the time they spend good part of the day by watching their screen rather than have a chat with a stranger.

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the advent of apps that you can install on your mobile phone and allow you to have access to a wide range of information we barely ask for help or information to other people. I believe that all

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innovation has brought us to be slightly arrogant.

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, with

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websites

a website

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Facebook

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Google

instagram

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we now live in

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multimedial

transmission that combine media of communication (text and graphics and sound etc.)

multimedia

world where we can have hundreds of

friends but

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friends, but

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we do not really talk with them if not by messages or likes.

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, when we wish happy birthday to someone that

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had reminded us, we limit ourself to write a simple message online. To conclude, I strongly agree with the fact that

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this

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these

new inventions are compromising our

hability

the quality of being able to perform; a quality that permits or facilitates achievement or accomplishment

ability

to interact socially between each other and I can only hope for

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to change.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.5

Complete response

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

257 words

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Some people argue that technological inventions, such as mobile phones, are making people socially less interactive. Do you agree or disagree?

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