Some people argue that technological inventions, such as mobile phones, are making people socially less interactive. Do you agree or disagree?

It is discussed that the advent of smart phones is bringing people to be less sociable. I personally agree with
this
statement because now we become more and more
dipendent
relying on or requiring a person or thing for support, supply, or what is needed
dependent
dependant
despondent
by our technical devices and with the introduction of social platform like
facebook
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Facebook
we now have
create
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created
a fake reality that bring us to interact less.
First
of all, in
this
days
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day
we can see that almost everyone as a smart phone and
sometime
on certain occasions or in certain cases but not always
sometimes
even more than one. Because of
this
we can see that people is almost
hipnotized
having your attention fixated as though by a spell
hypnotized
hypnotised
by their devices, and most of the time they spend good part of the day by watching their screen rather than have a chat with a stranger.
For
example with
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example, with
the advent of apps that you can install on your mobile phone and allow you to have access to a wide range of information we barely ask for help or information to other people. I believe that all
this
innovation has brought us to be slightly arrogant.
Secondly
, with
website
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websites
a website
like
facebook
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Facebook
,
google
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Google
or
instagram
we now live in
this
multimedial
transmission that combine media of communication (text and graphics and sound etc.)
multimedia
world where we can have hundreds of
friends but
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friends, but
then
we do not really talk with them if not by messages or likes.
For example
, when we wish happy birthday to someone that
facebook
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Facebook
had reminded us, we limit ourself to write a simple message online. To conclude, I strongly agree with the fact that
this
plural of "this"
these
new inventions are compromising our
hability
the quality of being able to perform; a quality that permits or facilitates achievement or accomplishment
ability
to interact socially between each other and I can only hope for
this
to change.

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