The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries.

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries.
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The tables compare the
sales
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data of
Fairtrade
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-labelled
coffee
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and
bananas
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between 1999 and 2004 in five countries, namely, the
UK
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,
Switzerland
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, Denmark,
Belgium
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,
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Sweden
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and Sweden
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.
It is clear that
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the
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of
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-labelled
coffee
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rose in all five European countries from
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1999 to 2004 but
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-labelled
bananas
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saw an increase in three out of five nations.
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, the
UK
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experienced by far the highest levels of spending on
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products. In 1990,
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both
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figures for
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coffee
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in
Switzerland
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had the highest revenue at 3
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euros
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,
while
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Sweden
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stood
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lowest
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by
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0.8
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euros
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in the same
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.
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,
Switzerland
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received the highest
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in
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Faritrade-labelled
bananas
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by 15
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million
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euros
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whereas
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Belgium
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reached the lowest revenue at 0.6
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. By 2004,
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of
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-labelled
coffee
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had risen to 20
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euros
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and
this
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was three times higher than
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's
sales
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figure for
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coffee
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in that
year
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. The
year
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2004
also
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saw a dramatic increase in the money spent on
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bananas
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in the
UK
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and
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with revenues rising by 32
millions
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million
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euros
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and 4.5
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euros
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respectively.
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of both products were far lower in
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Denmark,
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and
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in 2004. There is a small decline in the
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of
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coffee
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but the revenue remained
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at 2
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million
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euros
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and below in that
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.
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, the
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figure for
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bananas
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in
Belgium
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had grown considerably over six years,
while
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Sweden
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and Denmark saw a decrease.
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, It is noticeable that the
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and
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had the highest demand
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two
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the two
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products.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, coffee, bananas, uk, switzerland, belgium, sweden, million, euros, year, fairtrade with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fairtrade sales
  • significant growth
  • trends and patterns
  • market expansion
  • sustainable consumption
  • ethical products
  • consumer awareness
  • economic impact
  • percentage increase
  • market share
  • profit margins
  • trade initiatives
  • consumer behavior
  • retail figures
  • economic indicators
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