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Some people believe that school children should not be given homework by their teachers, whereas others argue that homework plays an important role in the education of children.

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Education is a critical task as it leads to
development
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the development
 of the beneficiary. A
child
 will learn something or the other with every
activity
 they perform. So there are different opinions about assignments given at home. Some are in
favor
promote over another
favour
 of the task while many are against the system. With increase population and
cut throat
ruthless in competition
cutthroat
 competition, schools have designed their curriculum which best fits their students to become a competitive
individuals
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individual
. Much of exertion has been given on extra curriculum activities along with
homework
. It brings tremendous
pressure which
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pressure, which
perhaps is difficult
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is perhaps difficult
 for many pupils. Countless parents do not
favor
promote over another
favour
 the concept of
homework
, which apparently going to be a burden. It consumes a lot of time and act as hindrance to other social
activity
 and playing time, it sounds hard enough to cope with both
activity
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activities
. On the other side, a good number of parents believe that
homework
 plays a pivotal role in
development
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the development
 of a
child
. When children are assigned with
homework
, they will learn to deal with academic and leisure time and prove themselves to be more efficient than counterparts.
For
instance in
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instance, in
 my
city there
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city, there
 are schools who pressurize students with both
activity
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activities
 as well as home assignments, and statistics have shown a positive response. Summing up with the facts, ultimate output of any
activity
 results in
favorable or undesired outcome
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a favourable or undesired outcome
favourable or undesired outcome
.
Accept space
.
 More pressure with
homework
 may turn out fruitful for a student, whilst if not at all may turn a
child
 towards laziness. So according to me
considerable amount
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a considerable amount
 of
homework
 is a significant part of
education system
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the education system
. It will benefit
child
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children
 in the future run.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Instills discipline
  • Deepen understanding
  • Independent learning
  • Reinforcement
  • Parental involvement
  • Curriculum insight
  • Burnout
  • Student stress
  • Leisure time
  • Relevance of assignments
  • Project-based learning
  • Interactive learning
  • Individual learning styles
  • Conducive study environment
  • Homework policy
  • Balanced approach
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