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Many people like to wear fashionable clothes. Why do you think this is the case ? Is this a good thing or a bad thing ?

#people #clothes #case
Stylish clothes appeal to an individual’s personality. On account of
this
, the majority of men and women prefer to dress in fashionable clothes. What could be the reason for
this
?
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?
 Is
this
 a worthy thing to be done or not
?
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This
 essay will attempt to objectively examine all significant components in detail. By elaborating on the constituent elements, it is my hope to shed greater illumination on the topic. In my opinion, there are myriad factors why people prefer wearing
such
 apparel.
In addition
, wearing fashionable clothes helps an individual in several ways.
First
, there is a high influence from social media and celebrities on teenagers. They follow their favourite movie star when buying clothes and upload it on the internet handles like
facebook
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Facebook
 and
instagram
.
Second
, the fashion industry is booming and there is an easy availability of these clothes in malls and even on online shopping websites. To substantiate the above, my friend mostly does a lot of designer
dresses
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dress
 shopping through an e-commerce website.
Furthermore
, to be with the
crowd it
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crowd, it
 is essential to have a stylish wardrobe.
Next
, if a person is working in a fashion industry, he or she has to stay up to date with the current trend. To corroborate what has just been stated, my neighbour works in an international fashion company and she has to be very presentable when going
on
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to
 meetings with clients. In light of the above, it is true that pressure from the internet and famous people is a distinct part of our reality
.
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In a similar vein, feeling confident about yourself is proof of the above being a positive development. Bringing
this
 essay to a close, there is adequate proof for
such
 human tendencies.
Additionally
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Additionally, this
this
 is a move in the right direction.
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