The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.

The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.
This
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These
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two maps depict the planning for developing
center
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the center
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of the Islip
town
city in the future. The first map shows
status
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the status
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of
this
center
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centre
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now and the
second
map shows the future developing
town
. The major
changing
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change
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is the
road
. In the past,
main
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the main
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road
passes through the
center
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centre
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of the
town
and have two minor roads which can access
to
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apply
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the school and
park
that
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apply
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locate in the
south-west
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southwest
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and
south-east
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southeast
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, respectively. In the future, the main
road
will limit all
vehicle
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vehicles
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and can enter by
pedestrian
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pedestrians
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only.
New
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The new
A new
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road
will enclose the
center
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centre
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of the
town
, can access
to
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apply
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both school and
park
, and become a dual carriageway. Another
changing
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change
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is
shopping
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a shopping
the shopping
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area. The southern shop will not change but the
the
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apply
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northern shop will develop
to
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into
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four functions: Bus station, Shopping
center
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centre
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, Car
park
and new housing. All housing
are
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is
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the same, but the
park
is going to be reduced the size.
Overall
,
new
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the new
a new
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plan is designed to separate the zone distinctly by
create
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creating
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the
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a
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new
road
around the
town
.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words center, town, road, park with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Small town
  • Centre
  • Development
  • Maps
  • Plans
  • Introduce
  • Topic
  • Purpose
  • Essay
  • Description
  • Current
  • Key features
  • Facilities
  • Advantages
  • Positive aspects
  • Benefits
  • Proposed
  • Changes
  • Improvements
  • Suggested
  • Potential
  • Course of action
  • Summarize
  • Opinion
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