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Many students are choosing not to study science in universities.what are the causes for that.what are the effects of that

Over the past few years, it's been seen that the number of University goers who opt to pursue
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 in higher education are diminishing rapidly. In
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 context, it becomes highly imperative to discuss the cause that lies behind the proliferation of
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 menace as well as the resulting consequences. There are many forces at play here
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which causes and accentuate the trend. But
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 and the foremost of all the contributing factors is the tremendous effort and time, these subjects demand for studying. The scholars of these subjects burn their elbow grease to cope up with their studies. Making things worse, their timeless efforts don't pay off well as the jobs they might get are not economically beneficial.
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a lot more
 than a
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 graduate.
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the unattractive salary package for
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 related jobs and endless tiring study schedule keeps the students away from choosing
science
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 for their career. The negative impact resulting from
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tendancy
an attitude of mind especially one that favors one alternative over others
tendency
 of disinterest towards
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 would be insurmountable.
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as less students pass out learning
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there would be a shortage
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of
 scientists in the upcoming years, which will hinder the development of newer inventions.
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, as
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increasing numbers
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 of educationally qualified scholars come out of colleges every year in other streams like business administration and arts, there develops
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an
 unbalanced workforce which results in unemployment. To conclude, nowadays educational institutions
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be a witness to
witnessed
 a downfall in the number of
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pupils
 taking up
science
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 and associated subjects during their tertiary education. The major reason behind
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 trend can be attributed to the less financial advantage it results in despite of the hard efforts they put in.
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 unemployment and hindered technological advancement.

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