Competitiveness is considered a positive quality among people. Do you agree with this statement? Write an essay of 200-250 words to state your viewpoint.

Organizations 
usuallyask
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usually ask
personal details like hobbies and marital status
from
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of
candidates
applyingfor
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applying for
job
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a job
jobs
the job
However
, different people have different opinions 
aboutthis
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about this
; some of them are in
favor
promote over another
favour
while others see it as irrelevant. People who are
infavor
of or characteristic of low rank or importance
inferior
of giving personal details (during the interviews) 
likehobbies
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like hobbies
and marital status say that it may help
company
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companies
to set up
rightexpectations
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right expectations
 with
candidate
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the candidate
candidates
a candidate
. As
married person
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a married person
might have
morepersonal
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more personal
commitment towards family than a single person, their fitment
forcertain kind
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for certain kinds
for certain kind
for a certain kind
of jobs which require high availability can be a challenge.
Also
,
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,
if organizations have details of interests and hobbies
ofcandidates
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of candidates
, it can help HR and management authorities
toplan
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to plan
team building and extra-curricular activities for its
employeeswhich
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employees, which
employees which
provides
better work environment
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a better work environment
in the company
andemployee
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and employee
 
also
 feels more connected. While on
other side
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the other side
somepeople
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some people
believe that the organizations hire a candidate 
ashe
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as he
or she has required skills, asking personal details
does not seems
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does not seem
logicalto
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logical to
them. They
also
see it as a violation of right to privacy.
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is
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also looking
also looks
justifiable and I
also
feel the same. Until and unless
company
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the company
a company
isgetting
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is getting
commitment from an employee to perform his or her duty, 
theyshould
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they should
not be concerned about these details. 
Lastly
, Iwould like
say
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to say
that though the personal details may not be relevant to 
thejob
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the job
  which a candidate has applied, but from
organization’s pointof
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the organization’s point of
organization’s point of
view I think these details help it to grow and build 
collaborativeand positive work
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a collaborative and positive work
collaborative and positive work
environment which provide more opportunities
foremployees
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for employees
to excel in their career. Asking these details is not
completelywrong but
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completely wrong, but
completely wrong but
it should be
on
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at
candidates’ discretion
weather
introduces two alternatives
whether
to
revealor
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reveal or
not to do so,
also
,
organization
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the organization
organizations
an organization
should assure its complete privacy. -- Thanks and Re
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rds ,Shahnawaz Alam

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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