Violence in society increases when more violence is shown on television. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, increased crime
rate
is one of the major issues faced by several nations. Faction of people believe that visual media has a prime role behind
this
. Even though media shows criminal
content stories
Accept comma addition
content, stories
,
that is
not the sole cause of increased criminal activities.
This
essay
not agree
Suggestion
doesn't agree
with the statement. It is a fact that, number of crimes which are reported globally was outrageous. Most of the people
blames
Suggestion
blame
media
Suggestion
the media
for all of these criminal
activities
Accept comma addition
activities, however
however
that is
not the prime cause. Absence of moral education as well as lack of supervision among children is the major cause of increased
violence
rate
. To exemplify, as per the study conducted by an international welfare agency states that juvenile delinquency
rate
increased more than two hundred percentage compared to past decade in all over the world. To continue, unemployment is one
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
reason of
violence
. Lack of employment leads people to anti-social groups and gradually they become a burden to the society.
Person
Suggestion
A person
The person
who cannot pay for his necessities may choose the path of
violence
.
Moreover
, political parties and other persons
intentionally creates
Suggestion
intentionally create
violence
for their personal needs. India is one the examples of political crimes. To recapitulate, lack of value based education among children and jobless economy are the reasons of massive
violence
rate
. Crime and
media
Suggestion
the media
is not
inter-related
having or showing interest; especially curiosity or fascination or concern
interested
as well as the television cannot influence people that much. In my opinion that argument is baseless.

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