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In many developing countries, there is a problem with declining quality of air and water from both industries and construction. What measures could be taken to prevent these ?

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The rapid increase of industrialization and construction posses many problems
to
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in
 developing countries concerning declining
air
quality
 and
water
quality
.
This
 essay will suggest measures to curb these two problems. A number of developing countries are confronting with declining
quality
 of
air
 and
water
. In order to prevent industries to contaminate
air
 and
water
, they should be set up on the outskirts of the city. The toxins released by industries can cause various ailments. The government can impose restrictions on industries regarding release of chemicals in
water
 bodies.
For instance
, in Global Climate Summit, many developing nations joined hands to launch punitive measures to control
deteriorating
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the deteriorating quality
quality
 of
air
 and
water
.
Furthermore
, people
can be make
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can be made
 aware of the
raising
advancing or becoming higher or greater in degree or value or status
rising
 concern of
air
 and
water
quality
 from industries and construction. Unless awareness is generated among masses
,
Accept space
,
a collective approach is undesirable. To illustrate,
few months
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a few months
 back, people of a metropolitan city raised their voice against
construction
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the construction
 of
metro rail bridge
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a metro rail bridge
the metro rail bridge
 that could devastate the environment.
Therefore
, appropriate measures are required to solve the problem
such
 as segregation of industrial area from
residential area
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residential areas
the residential area
a residential area
 and insight to people regarding environmental problems.

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