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The government should reduce the amount of money spent on local environmental problems and instead increase funding into urgent and more threatening issues such as global warming. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#government #amount #money
It is often argued if the
government
 should spend more money on critical issues like global farming and cut down on local environmental problems.
Although
 I agree that increasing funding into global warming is important, I think that solving local environmental problems could be beneficial. On the one hand, the
government
 should definitely allocate a bigger part of its budget to global warming.
This
 threatening phenomenon has been causing a set of catastrophic changes
to
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in
 the Earth
such
 as increasing average temperatures, extreme weather events, ice melting, sea levels rising
,
Accept space
,
etc
continuing in the same way
etc.
..
Therefore
, the economic and human cost caused by global warming is immeasurable. With proper financing, climate change could be slowed down significantly.
For example
,
electricity which
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electricity, which
 is mostly powered by fossil fuels and
accordingly
 emits an enormous amount of CO2 could be produced entirely by renewable resources with more funding in research. That’s why the
government
 should adequately spend on climate warming in the
first
 place.
On the other hand
, local environmental problems should
also
 be well funded.
Firstly
,
Accept space
,
improving local habitat would
also
 improve our current climate situation because local environment is undeniably a part of
global environment
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a global environment
the global environment
.
Moreover
, taking
actions
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action
 on local problems would assuredly spread more environmental awareness for the locals which partly makes them take more responsible actions in
favor
promote over another
favour
 of the environment.
Thus
, the authorities should
also
 spend more money on local issues. In conclusion, I think that the
government
 should wisely distribute its budget between solving threatening environmental problems and local problems to slow down and recover from global warming.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urgent issues
  • global warming
  • local environmental problems
  • funding
  • redirecting funds
  • broader environmental health
  • financial efficiency
  • return on investment
  • cost-effective
  • holistic approach
  • moral and ethical considerations
  • resource allocation
  • long-term consequences
  • short-term impacts
  • competing environmental concerns
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