Nowadays people are spending more time in workplace and staying away from home for work. Discuss its advantages and disadvantages with your own experience.

In recent days, most of the populace
become
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has become
becomes
is becoming
workaholic by extending their time at
work
instead
of sparing their time for their family. The main benefit of working more is to earn more to fulfil their family needs, while maintaining
distance
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a distance
from their house will affect their relationship is the drawback. To being with, people will get better remuneration when they spend their extra hours in the company to lead a sophisticated life.
That is
because in
this
competitive world they must survive with their family and provide shelter and good education for their children which requires more amount.
For example
, a recent survey conducted by Delhi university in India report that 75% of people are utilizing most of their
days
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day
at
work
to make money to satisfy their needs.
Thus
, to lead a wealthy lifestyle and to afford their offsprings tuition fees people spending more time at
work
. As far as the drawbacks is concerned, it will ruin their bonding with their families.
In other words
, in case of any happy or sorrowful occasions they may not able to participate which might cause problems at their homes.
In addition
, they cannot see the growth of their own kids when they provide most of their valuable minutes at
work
.
For instance
, a project manager
from
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of
a reputed company say in
this interviews
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this interview
these interviews
that he lost the chance of seeing and enjoying his
son
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son's
growth from his birth because of his
work
schedule which spoiled his connection with his son. In conclusion,
although
people get more benefits when they put their efforts in their company to earn more money, but they will slowly be losing their family interaction and enjoying the life with them.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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