The table below shows information and predictions regarding the change in percentage of the population aged 65 and above in three countries.
The table demonstrates the actual rate of the population over the age of 65 and above in Canada, Germany and
UK
, for the time of 1988, Correct article usage
the UK
2000
and with a rough estimation of the change in data in the year 2030.
Correct word choice
and 2000
Overall
, by 2030, Germany has the highest increased
of its senile people followed by Canada and Replace the word
increase
UK
. Population in those 3 countries constantly growing from 1988 until in the near future.
During the past span of 1988, Correct article usage
the UK
total
number of old people from the UK is exactly 14.23% and slightly rose about 0.66% in 2020, Change the article
a total
the total
however
, it was forecasted that in the breadth of 2030
it will grow sharply Add a comma
,2030
in
20.35%Change preposition
to
in
average. Canada Change preposition
on
on the other hand
,
has 16.32% in 1988 with a marked escalation Remove the comma
apply
on
Change preposition
in
Add an article
the number
number
at 20.67% and 26.35% in the term Fix the agreement mistake
numbers
of
2000 and 2030 respectively.
Change preposition
apply
Moreover
, Germany who
has the most senile people Correct pronoun usage
which
comparing
to other countries acquired 20.45% in 1988 and substantially rose by approximately 4.35% after 12 year time. It was Wrong verb form
compared
also
believed that in the period of
2030, it will increase considerably Change preposition
apply
in
5.68%.Change preposition
to
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